Too many short simple sentences can make your writing appear unsophisticated and your ideas seem disconnected.
This impression can also be caused by too many sentences in a row that begin with a simple subject. (Notice repeated subjects beginning the choppy examples below, e.g. She took, She had, She…)
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She took dance classes. She had no natural grace or sense of rhythm. She eventually gave up the idea of becoming a dancer.revised
She took dance classes, but she had no natural grace or sense of rhythm, so she eventually gave up the idea of becoming a dancer.
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Bears emerge from hibernation in the spring. They wander through wetlands. They feed mainly on grasses.revised
When bears emerge from hibernation in the spring, they wander through wetlands and feed mainly on grasses.
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Jesse Ventura has denied an interest in running for the senate. Ventura is the former governor of Minnesota.revised
Jesse Ventura, the former governor of Minnesota, has denied an interest in running for the senate.
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The boy asked his father a question. The boy is five years old. The question was about death.revised
The five-year-old boy asked his father a question about death.
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My aunt is very strict with my cousin. She expects her to study all the time.revised
My aunt is very strict with my cousin, expecting her to study all the time.choppy
I was exhausted. I stared at the page. I was unable to comprehend a single word.revised
Exhausted, I stared at the page, unable to comprehend a single word.NOTE: A modifying phrase must describe a word in the sentence. If it does not, you have what’s called a “dangling modifier,” e.g., Exhausted, the page was incomprehensible.
(Who is exhausted? Not the page! But the tired person is not part of the sentence. In this example, the word “exhausted” is the dangling modifier.)
Simple subject: The project was launched last month.
Prepositional phrase: With little fanfare, the project was launched...
Dependent clause: Once funding was secured, the project was launched...
Modifying phrase: Dubbed a pork barrel by the media, the project was launched...
Don’t string together too many clauses—usually no more than three.
Vary the length of your sentences. Too many long sentences in a row can be just as monotonous as too many short sentences. A short sentence can have great impact if well placed.
For more information
Miles, Robert, Marc Bertonasco, and William Karns. Prose Style: A Contemporary Guide. 2nd ed. Englewood Cliffs, New Jersey: Prentice Hall, 1991. Print.
Williams, Joseph. “Cohesion and Coherence.” Style: Ten Lessons in Clarity and Grace. 10th ed. Boston: Longman, 2010. Print. 66–81.